Sam and mines worst nightmare!
So I sent off a version of the poem to couple of friends including a full time poet (Lyndsay Price) my already author friend (Natalia Rojas) to get some feedback. As we are not trained writers it was great to get some outside views.
They loved it, with some minor tweaking and spelling mistakes (on my part) we have the complete thing.
Sam did bring up the rhyming structure of ABAB or is ABBA I agreed it was a good point, so I read the poem aloud and we decided we didn't need to change anything you just need a top storyteller!
Apparently when something gets edited, it about making changes and being willing to accept those changes. Things to consider are
-Does the poem flow?
-Is it too long ?
-Is it too short?
-Spelling mistakes (oh my word there were a few)
-Punctuation !,.?
-Could a better word be used?
So what now?
I am going to send a version off to a couple of mum's and see if they like it.
Sam needs to pull her finger out and put some arty things on this blog.
And would you people like to see a video of me reading the poem?? comment below and let us know!!!
and ...... Wait for it......
We have business cards on the way!
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